Friday 15 June 2012

SFFSat - June 16

Welcome to another SFFSat, where a bunch of us post snippets from our written works and shoot the breeze.  Thanks also to everyone who stops by and leaves awesome comments.  Much appreciated.

Today, I'm back to my WIP, To Catch A Marlin. I'm happy to say that the first draft is complete, and now I'm diving back into it for an encore. I'm hoping to send this into the hands of beta's before the middle of the month.

For those out of the loop, To Catch A Marlin is a futuristic cat and mouse tale between Special Inspector Pedroni and the vigilante Jax Marlin, who just happens to be a super sexy woman with ninja skills.

In this scene, Jax has 'infiltrated' into a baddies lair...it's pretty self-explanatory.


A thick-necked aide opened the door with a scowling frown, which didn’t improve his sour look in the least. To wipe his features clean of it, Jax rammed a fist right between his eyes. He staggered backwards in surprise. Before he could recover, she braced her hands on the doorframe, hoisted herself up, and kicked him in the jaw. She heard a crack, his jaw breaking, and as he crashed to the ground, a spew of blood flew out his mouth.
Turning back to face the door, she nudged the sentry droid she’d been holding upright earlier, out the way—it slumped sideways before shackling out into three pieces. Jax closed the door, and with purpose, marched across the spacious living area the Bacchus House’s penthouse suites offered its privileged guests, and tackled another lackey who darted out the plush kitchen with a butcher’s knife. He launched it in her direction; she tipped her body sideways before catapulting herself towards him in a forward flip, then did a half-skip bounce before a long-jump leap.
As she soared through the air, she pulled out her auto-cuffs and flung them at the man.



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14 comments:

  1. Ha, love how she attempts to 'improve' his expression. :P

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  2. Not a woman you want to have on your bad side, that's for sure...I especially enjoyed the line: To wipe his features clean of it, Jax rammed a fist right between his eyes.

    Hee hee...

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    1. Hehe, yes, Jax is a bit of a prude when it comes to seeing things that aren't "pretty."

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  3. Jax is a nasty package! She's Batwoman, I know it!

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  4. Wow, killer action here. Great details. You could lay out a choreographed fight no problem for like, a full-length feature film. It's that good. Great to read.

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    1. Thanks!!! I had fun doing this scene...and a few more. :) Glad you liked it!!

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  5. Action abounds today! Great pacing!

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  6. Tell me more about these auto-cuffs. I could use some. I'd only use them to support the forces of good, obviously....
    Loved the pacing and the descriptions.

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    1. Well you see, you fling them at someone you don't like, or you want to subdue (it's the size of a large marble). On impact, it shoots out wires around your body. The more you struggle, the tighter it gets. They tend to cut into flesh as well, if you're not careful. Nice, aren't they?

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  7. Infiltrated? Sounds like she went in loaded for bear!

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  8. Great action, very visual sequence for me.

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  9. I want auto-cuffs! Great snippet, heh.

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  10. Auto-cuffs? You don't even have to cuff people yourself anymore. That is the way to go.

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