Friday 29 June 2012

SFFSat - June 30


Welcome to another SFFSat, where a bunch of us post snippets from our written works and shoot the breeze.  Thanks also to everyone who stops by and leaves awesome comments.  Much appreciated.


Today, I'm happy to announce the release of the Ring of Fire Short Story Sampler Vol. 1. My short, To Catch A Marlin: Purged in Fire is featured, along with shorts from seven other talented and amazing author's. The sampler is available on Kindle in both ebook and paperback.

For those out of the loop, To Catch A Marlin is a futuristic cat and mouse tale between Special Inspector Pedroni and the vigilante Jax Marlin, who just happens to be a super sexy woman with ninja skills.

In this scene, from Purged in Fire, Jax picks a fights with a known criminal of the nasty variety. Don't worry, she's Jax -- she'll be alright.


She turned, twisted, deflected another blow, brought her leg up and around his neck and squeezed. She heard him gag. Pushing down with her leg, she brought his head to the floor, reared up and slammed a fist into his sternum. His body jerked from the pain. She released him quickly, spun around, punched under his jawbone and heard a crack as his teeth snapped together. His head shot up from the impact and he let out a pained moan. Unrelenting, she planted another blow in his ear. Immediately, disorientation took effect and Moor’s eyes went wide and unfocused. He staggered and slumped to the floor, struggling to get his bearings. For good measure, she punched him in the other ear.



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13 comments:

  1. Good action sequence. And although passive voice sometimes works and it's not always a no no, the phrase "disorientation took effect" seems awkward to me. You already "show" that Moor is disoriented in this sentence, so don't "tell" (plus, we don't need the adverb, immediately - this is a sequence description, so it's implied). Maybe: Moor's eyes went wide and he staggered, struggling to get his bearings. For good measure, she punched him in the other ear and he slumped to the floor.

    Just an idea. And thanks for the heads up on the free sampler. I just snagged my copy!

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    1. Thanks for that helpful bit of editing! I shall remember this for future writing endeavours! Glad you enjoyed as well. And ENJOY your copy...it's not just my stuff, but a whole bunch of others as well.

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  2. I liked the cadence. Remind me not to get in a fight with Jax

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    1. Don't worry. So long as you haven't done anything bad...you're safe. :)

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  3. Is it wrong that i am in love with Jax!? Great snippet, Mrs T!!

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    1. Thank you! And from Jax: "Bless ya socks!"

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  4. Glad I'm not the one she's fighting!

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    1. Thanks! Me too. I'm the biggest chicken when it comes to fighting!!

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  5. Clear and easy to visualize. Go Jax!

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    1. Thanks! Hey, I should get T-shirts made with that slogan! :)

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  6. Jax - she's such a bad ass. That poor (evil) man was probably just going about his (evil) day, without and (evil) care, and then along comes Jax, and BOOM! She really knows how to bring the hurt.

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    1. Ha! Yes, one does start to feel sorry for the (evil) man...especially when what's to come later on is ten time more painful that I'm not sure how the poor (evil) man can ever survive from it and continue on with his (evil) life. ;P

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  7. Congratulations on the release!

    Great, visual snippet.

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