After a short break (and a little holiday) I'm back on board with the SFFSat snippets.
SFFSat is a place where a bunch of us post snippets from our written works and also shoot the breeze a little. And before I get ahead of myself, thanks and appreciation as always to those who stop by and leave fantastic comments.
This week, I'm posting a snippet from To Catch A Marlin, a more or less finalized WIP due out this October with Ring of Fire Publishing. A futuristic cat and mouse tale involving Special Inspector Pedroni and the vigilante Jax Marlin, who just happens to be a super sexy woman with ninja skills.
Today, we have the very first opening lines to the story...
“Pedroni!”
Special
Inspector Michael Pedroni peered up from writing his report to find Chief
Inspector Aoki briskly walking towards his desk. The CI looked irritated, which
meant something crawled up his aft orifice and laid eggs—and now he was about
to hatch them all over Pedroni.
CI
Aoki dropped a memory sphere and a flimsy report folder on Pedroni’s desk. “The
El Sayed case, it’s yours with an upgrade.”
Pedroni
narrowed his eyes. “The kidnapping case—I thought that was Boucher’s.”
“Well
the ever-efficient Boucher decided he’d rather have a burst appendix.” Aoki fussed
with his tie, a favored habit when something bothered him. “Bulletin on the
case, it’s no longer a kidnapping.”
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Cheers!
Welcome back, TK!
ReplyDeleteGreat dialog!! And nice set up--thrusting us right into the action with your wonderful humor.
:) Heidi
Cheers, thank you!! Admittedly, this first chapter has been giving me endless gripe. Glad it works now. :)
DeleteWell if it's not a kidnapping what is it?? Great way to set the story. Good luck with the release.
ReplyDeleteHmm, good question! And it's not a murder either.... :) Thanks!!
DeleteI can't stop smiling and laughing about the "crawled up his aft orifice" sentence...hee hee. :-)
ReplyDeleteGreat stuff!
Ruh roh, Raggy! Complications from the get-go! Great start! I loved the laying eggs line.
ReplyDeleteThanks. I did like that line myself. ;)
ReplyDeleteSqueee!! I love this story, but you knew that. Fantastic opening! I cannot WAIT for this one!
ReplyDeleteNot a kidnapping, but is seemed like one at first, but not a murder either... A runaway, maybe?
ReplyDeleteIt's IS intriguing, isn't it! :)
DeleteWeirdness...could have sworn I posted a comment earlier this morning...????
ReplyDeleteI laughed and chuckled out loud at the aft orifice line. Enjoyed it!
It happens...memory is a weird thing indeed. ;)
DeleteGlad you liked the line. I loved it too!!!
Hmmm. If it's not a kidnapping, what is it? Doesn't sound good to me.
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