Friday, 14 September 2012

SFFSat - Sept 15

Welcome back to another Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday.

SFFSat is a place where a bunch of us post snippets from our written works and also shoot the breeze a little. And before I get ahead of myself, thanks and appreciation as always to those who stop by and leave fantastic comments.

This week, another snippet from To Catch A Marlin, a more or less finalized WIP due out this October with Ring of Fire Publishing. A futuristic cat and mouse tale involving Special Inspector Pedroni and the vigilante Jax Marlin, who just happens to be a super sexy woman with ninja skills.

Today, Inspector Pedroni has just arrived in his room on the Bacchus Dome (in space) and discovered a bouquet of flowers in his room. It just so happens that they are his favourite kind (peonies), and around his apartment complex on Earth, there is an abundance of them which he loves. No one knows his particular affection to these flowers, unless they've been observing him with scrutiny...


The customs officials at the spaceport insisted he store his weapon in his carry-on while being processed, which now sat at the door. It was his only piece of luggage but it looked defiled after Customs had their way with it, and bulged unseemly with the zip not fully closed and a corner of his spare shirt sticking out. Not even a special inspector with the ICSP could get out of a customs search.
Quickly, Pedroni marched over, dug around in the bag and pulled out his weapon. He checked it, primed it, flicked the safety on, then, tucked it into his shoulder holster. He felt better.
So, he nodded, Marlin arranged this.
He couldn't rule it out, coincidence or not, it also meant she knew him better than he'd expected, and knew where he lived. He expected that. Chase a prey long enough, they start to hunt you in return by watching what you did.

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18 comments:

  1. Always a fun time when the hunter becomes the prey...

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  2. Curse those customs agents always meddling in your stuff!

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    1. T.M., Heidi, Patrick, thanks!!! Yep, Customs...sigh. Where do I start... :)

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  3. I'll chime in with T.M. - nice to see a subtle hint with greater implications - she knows what kind of flowers he likes

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  4. Great snippet. However, if he feels he's prey, I almost wonder why he doesn't have his gun already holstered.

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    1. Good point. Of course (I should probably have mentioned this) this was the first encounter he had with her invading his space. Plus, Customs made him keep his gun in his luggage... :) Thanks for stopping by!!

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  5. Liked the detail about customs... they never seem to be able to put anything back right!

    Intriguing snippet.

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  6. Ah, but did customs (or Jax) mess with his gun? One suggestion: reword the first sentence. The "which" is a little ambiguous, and for a moment threw me out of the story.

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  7. (snicker) Had their way with it and defiled his luggage. LOL!! Love it!

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  8. I loved this line, '...it looked defiled after Customs had their way with it,..'

    Great snippet :)

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  9. Great snippet! My interest is definitely piqued, and I love your writing style!

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