Science Fiction Fantasy Saturday (SFFSat) is a place where a bunch of us post snippets from our written works and also shoot the breeze a little. And before I get ahead of myself, thanks and appreciation as always to those who stop by and leave fantastic comments.
This is an untitled snippet, and something I may just write as I go along, strictly for SFFSat. What do you say? This sounds like a plan. Let the pansting (is that a word?) begin! For now, let's call this a SF-ish, Twilight Zone-ish, X-File-ish something or the other...
This is the very first opening scene...
“Dinosaur.”
“You
got that right. This tech is pretty ancient.”
A
general calculation pegged the control room on the bridge to be circa 1960s,
complete with round screens and dials and protruding knobs like toothpaste caps
and sharp-edged consoles, even an old-fashioned landline telephone in a
horrible peachy color was mounted at one end.
“No,
I mean really. Dinosaur.”
I looked over at Mason. Judging from his
expression, I knew immediately he didn’t mean the outdated navigational
equipment on the derelict vessel. He stared at a point behind me and looked
like he’d just pooped his pants, in the worst way possible. He even stood funny.
Cheers!
Lesson learned. When someone says "Dinosaur," they mean it! Sounds like a fun story worthy of pantsing-it out.
ReplyDeleteBTW, Pansting is the only way to go. It's too much fun. You never know what's going to happen next. That's why my character's always say, "Now What?" If you ever hear someone say that, now you know they're directing the question to me.
Haha! Well, this is all new to me. It's quite fun, like anything-goes Saturday! :D
DeleteAlways fun to take on a new project, even one where you're not sure where it's going to go. I have to disagree with Cary, though, in that sometimes a little bit of structure still keeps the end game in sight. ;-)
ReplyDeleteLove the retro look of the bridge...and the crewman with his 'accident.' :-)
I have to agree with you there. Like the light at the end of the tunnel, I like some sort of 'guidance' as to which direction to go. With this, I have none (so far). Thanks!!
DeleteI love this. I remember a similar exchange in an online RPG years ago. My "crewman" was examining a ship and he said "Blast!" Everyone thought he was making an excited exclamation, but he was really pointing out the big hole in the ship. "No, blast!" (pointing) Those double-takes are priceless. Well done.
ReplyDeleteHaha! Funny. Thank you! I'm having fun with this for sure!!
DeleteBrilliant, T.K.! I laughed out loud.
ReplyDeleteHA!! Thanks!! Gotta have some laugh out loud moments, right!
DeleteThis was really funny. I loved it. You need to keep these coming! I'm not a pantser myself, but you seem to have a flair for it.
ReplyDeleteThanks!! I'll have to conjure up some new words for next week!
DeleteThat was awesome! It reminded me of the Doctor Who episode 'Dinosaurs on a Spaceship'! And is there really any good way to look like you just pooped your pants?
ReplyDeleteAlas, there is no good way to look... Heehee!! Thank you!!
DeletePantsing is a word and it's a way of living.
ReplyDeleteDinosaurs on a Space Ship... Can't go wrong with that. Toothpaste caps *snicker.* This is entirely too much fun. Keep it going. sometimes a little crazy pantsing just for fun is the best way clear the mental palate. I'm all in favor of goofing with characters!
Thanks, JC. It is a "cleansing" effect, indeed... ;)
DeleteLOL! I loved this from the first word to the last couple of sentences. I imagine there is something very big and very scaly nearby. Great humor here. This is a fun start. Looking forward to more.
ReplyDeleteHaha! Thanks!! Yep, there's definitely something out there!
ReplyDeleteI love the casual tone of the snippet. Looking forward to more.
ReplyDeleteThank you!!
DeleteLOL I love scenes like that. Looking forward to more.
ReplyDeleteThanks Patrick!!
DeleteYou get double bonus points for using the term "pooped his pants" AND combining a dinosaur on a space ship - who wouldn't want to read more. I also liked the comment about campfire stories and "bearing" with you in the intro - intended or not. Keep it coming.
ReplyDeleteHaha! Thanks!!
DeleteLove this! Very descriptive and full of humor. Keep pantsing! (without poop, please!)
ReplyDeleteThanks!!
DeleteHe, he, 'look behind you!!'
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