Once again, another snippet from my other WIP, To Catch A Marlin - A futuristic cat and mouse chase involving Special Inspector Michael Pedroni and the vigilante he chases, Jax Marlin...who he has become smitten with. Well, Jax is quite beautifully exotic, as vigilante's go.
In this scene, we find Jax having a 'chillaxing' moment in her hotel room on the Bacchus Dome (that's in outer space)...
The room smelled of disinfectant and fresh laundry. A good smell. A safe smell.
Hospitals smelled like that, they were good places, they made you better, stronger…
Jax Marlin smiled to herself as she cracked open a bottle of beer and took a deep, long gulp. She tossed her jacket on the floor, glad she didn’t have to be neat, glad she didn’t have to remember to be neat. Leading a double life was nothing short of a pain in the ass.
Glad that’s over with. She chuckled to herself and dropped into the couch, slouching, and propped a leg on the coffee table. Her hard boot heel made a clunking noise on the smooth surface; she loosened the belt buckle and let out a beery burp. It had been a long day. Recon work usually was.
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Love Jax's attitude. Can just picture that scene!
ReplyDeleteFab description! Yes, I can imagine leading a double life to be that much of a pain, lol.
ReplyDeleteYes, double lives can be rather hard... :)
DeleteGreat descriptions, even if I don't (personally) like disinfectant smells. I do like a beer now and then though!
ReplyDeleteI don't have a pleasant take on hospitals, so I wouldn't enjoy a disinfectant smell either...fun little excerpt, and the end made me chuckle. :-)
ReplyDeleteCary, T.M., admittedly, I love the smell of disinfectants. It's a clean smell...and being a semi-pro germ freak, it's also a good smell. :)
DeleteI'd love to relax like that!
ReplyDeleteheehee! loved it! I cab just see the juxtaposition between beautiful and slob! excellent snippet.Well done Mrs T!
ReplyDeleteThank you!! And nice comparison..
DeleteMaybe the disinfectant was lemon scented...
ReplyDeleteI'm thinking more pine scented...let's hope it was something gross like gardenia. Ick!
DeleteI smelled dryer sheets, the soft floral kind. And I want a beer! Nice snippet.
ReplyDeleteOh, I love dryer sheet smells! So clean and "sleepy-smelling".
DeleteInteresting character. I wonder what she'd been doing with her double life.
ReplyDeleteSomething dull and safe, like a receptionist?
DeleteObsessively neat in her double life?
ReplyDeleteI believe to hit the nail on the head!!
DeleteI love the disparity between her loving the clean smells and acting like a slob.
ReplyDeleteThanks. She's a bit of a contradiction. It's...complicated. :)
DeleteThanks everyone for stopping by and leaving these fab comments. Much appreciated!!
ReplyDeleteLike others who have posted, I HATE that hospital smell. This scene still worked for me, though, because Jax's personality shines through. I'm imagining her with a smirk.
ReplyDeleteHospitals also don't allow beer, at least not the last time I was in one. ;-P
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