Friday 11 May 2012

SFFSat - May 12

Welcome to another SFFSat, where a bunch of us post snippets from our written works and shoot the breeze.  Thanks also to everyone who stops by and leaves awesome comments.  Much appreciated.

Today a WIP from the full length, To Catch A Marlin tale (a futuristic cat and mouse chase involving Special Inspector Michael Pedroni and the vigilante he chases, Jax Marlin...who he has become smitten with.  Well, Jax is quite beautifully exotic, as vigilante's go).

In this scene, Inspector Pedroni walks into the Neptune hotel, on the Bacchus Dome, hoping to find some clues on Jax's whereabouts.

The Neptune hit him square between his eyes with its opulence.  Like being sucked into a whirlpool of an underwater fantasyland, oceanic features dominated the décor and theme of the hotel.  A roar of rushing water filled his ears, the air moist with a fine spray of wetness and a hint of saltiness tickled his nose.  When he looked down, wondering why his feet moved oddly, he realized he walked on sand and seashells. 
        So, this is what it looks like.  He couldn't help the smile tugging his mouth.  Like most of his generation, he'd grown up in the city, never once seeing the ocean—let alone clean, white sand on the seashore.  Something darted across the sand, a crab bot.  At least, he hoped it was a crab bot.  He'd heard real crabs were partial to biting hard.  As he walked further into the entrance lobby, virtual water frothed at his feet before ebbing back inside.
        "Now that is cool," he muttered with a grin.  Immediately feeling like an idiot, he quickly glanced around to see if anyone heard.

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14 comments:

  1. I agree. That is cool. :-)
    Great snippet!

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    1. It IS, isn't it? I wish the beaches I go to are like that. Hate getting wet... :P Thanks for stopping by!!

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  2. That is just like walking into my chippy!! lol
    Well done Chiefy T!!

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  3. Sounds like a good place to hide. Who wants to chase anyone on a, fake, beach?

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  4. Your description is really vivid! Love it.

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    1. Thanks, Misa. I pictured it from my perspective of "my ideal beach" - where I don't get wet, don't get sunburned, don't get sandy (well, the sandy bit's gonna happen, in this case)...but you get my meaning, right? :) Thanks for stopping by.

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  5. Seriously, that IS cool! I am in such a beach mood, you're teasing me! I need to get me one of them! Great snippet! I can't wait to read this.

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  6. :o) I love beaches! And beach scenes. Where can I get a crab bot?

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  7. Virtual water. Can you feel it as well as see it?

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  8. I just love the idea of a beach in the foyer and virtual water! :)

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  9. Love the idea of virtual water so your clothing would stay dry. Wonderful description and imagination.

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  10. Love the sensory details of this virtual world!!

    I'm excited about this book, TK.

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  11. I'm pretty sure I would react in much the same way. And with the imagery you provided, I could see everything. He's right--this place is elfin' cool.

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