Friday 18 May 2012

SFFSat - May 19

Welcome to another SFFSat, where a bunch of us post snippets from our written works and shoot the breeze.  Thanks also to everyone who stops by and leaves awesome comments.  Much appreciated.

Today a WIP from a working short, The Marlin Strikes Again, from the To Catch A Marlin tale (a futuristic cat and mouse chase involving Special Inspector Michael Pedroni and the vigilante he chases, Jax Marlin...who he has become smitten with.  Well, Jax is quite beautifully exotic, as vigilante's go).

In this scene, Jax has just apprehended a pedophile and about to take him away to "punish" him...

Like an arena wrangler, she had him prostrate, restraints slapped across his wrists and a muzzle cone jammed into his mouth.  Mechanical cords automatically whipped out from the cone’s sides and wrapped around his face, holding the muzzle in place.  If he tried to scream, which he did, the cone would activate and drive itself further down his throat.  If he kept it up, he’d choke himself slowly.  If he were smart, he’d learn to shut up.  Either way, she didn’t care what he did—the more he suffered, the better. She needed a fast out, unnoticed, and was glad she brought her airboard.  Good thing she came prepared.  She hadn’t expected to actually find the pedophile, but her hunch had directed her well.

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19 comments:

  1. Sounds like something out of a horror novel, but well-deserved, I'd say! Hopefully the pain is being drawn out over a long period of time! :-)

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    1. I believe he'll have his proper comeuppance in due course.... stay tuned.

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  2. Sounds kind of like what my cousin goes through on a Saturday night, minus the whole pedophile thing. That's a nasty thing to do to a guy, but he deserves it.

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  3. Gah - that cone is gruesome! Eeks! Jax certainly does not play for half-measures.

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    1. She shows little mercy to those who deserve painful fates. Then she goes out an enjoys a nice cup of hot chocolate without a backward thought. :)

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  4. A lot going on in a little space. Nice details. Great snippet. Do they sell muzzle cones at Wal-Mart?

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    1. Not sure, but if they're ever invented, I know some neighbourhood kids that would like to wear them all day.... ;P

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  5. Wow, this is a great snippet. The description, the energy, the technology. It's just stellar.

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    1. Thank you!!! Writing about Jax is a nice cathartic release...she gets to do what normal people can't/won't do to punish people. Vigilante's rock!!

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  6. Wow, this is a great snippet. The description, the energy, the technology. It's just stellar.

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  7. Great snippet! I am definitely rooting for Jax...vigilantes are some of my favourite types of people.

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  8. Get him Jax! I was immediately sucked into the story. Good job.

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  9. Just a little afternoon torture session, although it sounds like he deserves it.

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  10. You've outdone yourself in thise snippet!!
    I think I actually be in love with Jax!
    The peado deserves everything he gets!
    bravo Jax and Mrs T!

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  11. Always love your tech, TK! And your characters--Jax is already becoming a favorite. :)

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    1. Thanks Heidi, and everyone!! Have to admit too, Jax is my new favourite star girl!!

      Thanks again for stopping by everyone!! Cheers!!

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